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I'm working on a mobile app which allows users to book and share taxi journeys. One of the features in the app is a notifications screen which alerts the user each time they get a request for a seat in one of their journeys. I wanted to ask is the following phrase appropriate:

"Username wants to share."

Tapping on the notification gives more information. What do you think of this - is it a good phrase to use or can I improve it?

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It seems off to me to use the word "share" like that; it would feel better if you used it as a transitive verb. It would be better if you could make it less generic as well, something that would be more specific to just taxis/etc.:

  • Paul wants to share a cab.
  • Paul wants to ride with you.
  • Paul would like a seat.
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  • +1 for "share a cab" - The mockup doesn't show me any context. It made me think of sharing photos or status updates without the word "cab" in there.
    – Surreal Dreams
    Feb 3, 2014 at 14:44
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1) You're sharing a ride from A to B, not a person. The difference is subtle, but in effect it's going to be more interesting to give a prominent place to the start and finish of this trip. That way you'll get an idea of what is actually being offered. Then make "Paul" secondary.

2) Paul wants to share is great, but I don't care that that person wants to do something. It's about what I want. So perhaps turn it into Paul is offering. That way it sounds like an offer, rather than sounding like a notification about someone who wants to do something.

Otherwise, and this could help in the marketing aspect, perhaps call your service "hitch" or something other noun and say "Paul shared a hitch".

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